Mougeki Mero OCs - Reviews by Fanfiction-chan
The OC's information will be in regular text. My comments will be bolded.
Name: Kyoko Nekouto So apparently her surname is a pun on "cat" and "sister." I find this cute, since it describes her well, as she is a sister and wears cat ears.
Appearance: She have a short pink hair, pink eyes and wears neko ears. She also wears a braid on her head, below her bangs. So, she wears cat ears. Meaning, they're not actually attacthed to her? You might want to clarify... Also, don't forget her breast size, stockings, and uniform!
Personality: She loves cats just like her sister, and she loves her sister and her grandma a lot. She have a lot of friends at school. She is part of the cooking club, and she really does cook well. You might want to give her a couple flaws, because her personality seems kind of flawless. Maybe she's naive or too trustworthy? Just a suggestion.
Background: She was born and live in Buraza. She and her sister were created by her grandma, who was a really lovely person. The grandma was rich, so she gave the best to the Nekouto sisters: best clothes, best education, the best mansion...Kyoko has being a nice and thankful girl since she started to live with her mother. She tries to do her best at school even if she is a bit more slow to learn things. She is really talkative and sometimes this ends up at her going to the Counselor's room. Oh. So she does have flaws. That's good, I was worried she'd be kind of a Sue. But anyways, she was created by her grandmother? Meaning what? She was adopted, did the grandmother give birth to her and the father was unknown? If the grandmother gave birth, though, then she'd be a regular mother, not a grandmother... Also, I like the rich part. It makes sense, because Akademi's a rich school and it costs a lot of money. So, in short, you might want to clarify about her grandmother.
Score - 8/10 - The backstory part confused me, but other than that, you're in the clear!
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